practice makes perfect, but too much practice makes you a whore
This says more in a short space than I can ever manage. If one reminds a lover of a fabulous porn star, I suppose that's as much a compliment as an insult. In lines two and three I'd edit out sleepy and leave drowsy. They mean the same (to me) and drowsy is the better word. Great name, Sasha. I see a dark-haired Russian beauty.
I changed the order of the words a bit and swapped sleepy for dreamy ;) good catch, thank you!
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